Hey this is a great story, but I think it could use a little bit of editing. Some words sound odd in places and others are just typos. Otherwise, this story is pretty spot on! The story itself is good, but am I the only one who feels like people are trying way too hard and adding way too many unnecessary details? I have no problem with a little added exaggeration for humor, Love Pre-K Teacher Life Turkey Thanksgiving T-Shirt but it gets to a point where it just feels cringy. You can get the entire point of this story across and still be funny while being too the point quicker and cutting a good half of the unnecessary details and comparisons out. No I’m with you. Felt like they were trying way too hard with all the analogies and metaphors. The bad punctuation and grammar was just icing on top for the cringiness for me.
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Yeah, I noticed that as well. There are a lot of good 50 cent words thrown throughout, but there was a serious lack in punctuation. It made it hard to find the break in the run-on sentences, so it was confusing and hard to understand. You’re right, though. Good story, but seriously heavily padded. Yeah it does kind of seem that way. That’s just the style of some writers.Love Pre-K Teacher Life Turkey Thanksgiving T-Shirt I’m just saying that this story needed to be proofread before it was posted. There’s one part that says “check” when it was supposed to say “chick”. Just little typos that can be fixed. I noticed those too. I think the needlessly complicated and often difficult to follow prose was what irritated me more. But maybe it’s just me
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This is a bad attempt at jabbing a writing style instead of making the story understandable. The use of “where as ” without any need of a transition is where I stopped reading. It hurt. The idea of someone presenting (I assume) plain tofu as a dish turns my stomach. Marinade it, season it, crumb it, fry it, anything but plain! Gothapotamus began with some of it, and then quickly tries switch over to regular turkey. Only to be rebuffed by coach buzzcut who told gothapotamus that she needed to eat the $45 of tofu she forced everyone to purchase. How is this possible? Love Pre-K Teacher Life Turkey Thanksgiving T-Shirt I’m reading it 8 hours later and it is still hard to follow because of all the spelling and grammar errors. OP should have just waited until they had time to properly write the story.